Thursday 27 February 2014

Unloved House description by Amy

As Luke trudged down the rickety staircase, he realised just how much of a mess the house was. Newspapers were scattered all around in each and every room, dating back to at least 1992. In the kitchen, plates from last night would have more and more sticky sludge, as the nights carried on. If the winds were to get too reckless, the house would creek struggling to keep standing. One night, there was a storm, too strong for the unloved house to cope with. The building suddenly collapsed into no more than little pieces of concrete, taking Luke with it.

12 comments:

  1. Very good.You described it very well.

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  2. brilliant descriptive words, well done Musicshadow10.

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  3. Thats realy good.

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  4. REAL GOOD !!!

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  5. Very good adjectives!!!!

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  6. its really good with a lot of descriptive words! Ciara

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  7. Great adjectives and it's very dramatic!

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  8. :Good describing words
    :Very engaging
    #change sentence length.

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  9. Really good i loved it i really want to know what happens next

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  10. it sounds like it had been written by a real author

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  11. It makes you want to read on so can you make part two?!

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