Tuesday 7 May 2013

100WC - Sam


“Mum, Mum, Mum!” I screeched as I saw a spider as big as my hand crawling on my bed. I waited for a reply but none came. I waited some more but still nothing. I ran to mum but all I found were shreds and blood all over the floor.

I started running to the spider but as I reached my door I found my bed covered with blood and my mum’s body.

I hear a hissing from behind me I would spin on my heels but that’s when it bit me and suddenly the pain in my arm thrashed.

   

1 comment:

  1. Hi Sam, what a gruesome 100WC!
    * Accurately punctuated speech.
    * Effective use of prompt.
    # Maybe describing the spider in more detail would help your readers understand why it was so scary.
    Well done and keep writing. :)

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