After racing titanicly through the eerie woods I came to a
sudden halt my heart plummeted to floor... Laying still as a wall the most
beautiful girl ever lying with a knife stabbed in her pale hand. Cautiously I
stepped towards her. She twitched I can still save her I thought, running as
fast as humanly possible. Her soft hand touched my hand, slowly I carried her
to a hollow weeping willow. “Why” she whispered in a shadowy voice, “no one
should face death at the age of sixteen” I spoke silently within three heart
pounding days she was perfect.
hi Scott it look awesome
ReplyDeleteYou can`t possibly improve this because it is so good!
ReplyDeleteWell done Scott!
this is amazing
ReplyDeleteThis is epic! I like your style of writting! nice vocab eg. shadowy, cautiously etc. Keep it up! :)
ReplyDeletethis is amazing scott! are you thinking of the hunger games, and is she katniss or jessica ennis? in ur opinion
ReplyDeleteThis is cool, I love the bit about the knife in the hand;)
ReplyDeleteHi Scott
ReplyDeleteThis is a really intense story. You’ve forgotten to include this week’s writing prompt in your story ‘now what do I need’ There’s still time to submit another story though - see what your teacher says!