Brilliantly, the bright pink tiger rapidly sprinted down the
fresh lime green hill. Adventurously, the tiger leaped across the river
additionally, fish jumped out of the water skimming the tigers razor-sharp
paws. Surprisingly, the tiger had luxury, including a marvelous castle and a
private chief; undoubtedly, you would adore that, wouldn’t you? Slowly, the exhausted
tiger stood up and gradually reached the metal unbeatable gate to other
dangerous animals! Suddenly, while the tiger was exploring he stumbled against
a colossal rhino, what would he do? Dangerously, the rhino leaped of a solid
rock and flew extremely noisily and dive bombed at the tiger sadly this was the
end of the heroic animal.
By William Riches
good work Will i like it (all of it)
ReplyDeleteHello William,
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, thank you for underlining the prompt words. They were much easier to see.
You have made great use of adverbs in your story. I can also see you have used all of the prompt words effectively.
I can tell from your story you, like me, see the tiger as a magnificent animal. I have seen photos of a white tiger (albino) but I have never seen a pink one. How sad he was lost at the end of your story.
Thank you for sharing your interesting story. I hope you continue to enter the 100WC.
@RossMannell (Team 100WC)
Teacher, NSW, Australia
this is epic!!! comment on mine.
ReplyDeleteThank Ypu for all the delightful comments about my story
ReplyDeleteSorry, miss type error Thank you all for the delightful comments about my Story!
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