In a crystal white house there were 3 people named Tifa, Denzil and Marie tifa wa part of the strife deliveries service and far away from their house there were three remnants named Kadajh Loz And yazue they were all part or f someone called. sephiroth.
Kadajh Loz and yazue all had jenover sells in them but they needed to get some more jenover
sells to make sephiroth. Just to make a long story short lets skip ahead. Kadajh is a girl.
Cloud had just finished of Kadajh but when she liffted the lid she turned into sephiroth
Hi there, Spencer,
ReplyDeleteThis is a very futuristic sounding 100WC but I enjoyed because you sounded so authoritative. Did you get your inspiration from a game or book or are these characters that you have created?
My top tip for your next 100WC would be to make sure you read through and check that you have used capital letters where you need them.
Well done, keep up the good work :)
Mrs Radd (Team100WC) Northamptonshire, England.
Hi Spencer, there's a lot of interesting ideas in this 100WC, although it does get pretty complicated and quite difficult for a reader to understand in places.
ReplyDeleteI had a feeling that these names may be taken from a book or film - and a quick "google" has revealed that they are taken from a computer game, which is probably why I have no idea what is going on! Maybe next time, remember that your reader may not have the same background knowledge as you, and so if you use characters and events taken from elsewhere, take care to explain a little bit more about them.
Keep writing!
From Steph Hope (Team 100WC)
;)Very Imaginative
ReplyDelete;)Good Story ;p
;(Capitals And Punctuation
good story verry nice l
ReplyDeleteVery good 100 word challenge, I have read it and it's very good.
ReplyDeletegood you described how the house looks like
ReplyDeleteIts very good, maybe a bit to short.
ReplyDeletegood describing about the house I really liked it :)
ReplyDeleteit was awesome
ReplyDeleteCool good
ReplyDeleteGood, descriptive start
ReplyDeleteGood story did you get the names of a book or a game
ReplyDeletesmashing piece of work
ReplyDeletenice story like everything very good ;)
ReplyDeletegood story but that doesn't look like 100 words
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