100 word challenge;The story of a killer bin.
Reshelle an average girl with a very average background,she had a tacky old cat;a nattering mum , the sort of mum that takes ten minutes to say goodbye when round the neighbors house which you hate ; and , a dad who thinks he knows everything .
While at school, she had to sit through a calculator test with no calculator.she didn't bother to do the test , she was quite a obstinate girl with no desire to change her point of view.
when she got home she went to put a wrapper in the bin, but when she lifted the lid a dead cat layed there.
I really like the description and plot lines you develop in this shot piece of writing. I would like to see you pay close attention to setting out though. It seems a really minor thing, but it does affect the readers attention when reading.
ReplyDeletei liked the description though maybe not enough of the actual plot
ReplyDeletevery good and i liked the description
ReplyDeleteits really good and there is a lot big words....:)
ReplyDeletechildish :)
awsom!
ReplyDeletethat is a really good peice of writing
ReplyDeleteAwesome
ReplyDeleteI like the way you started your story. I think that your ending could have tied in a little bit better with the beginning.
ReplyDeleteVery Advanced Adjectives And Good Use Of Subordinate Clauses
ReplyDeletefantastic sabordanate clauses
ReplyDeletethat was awesome!
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