Sunday 16 March 2014

a piece of descriptive writing around 150 words

This was for the 100WC but I unfortunately posted it too late. That is why I have added to it and it is now nearer to 150 words than 100.

The attic held memories. The memories were held in a beautifully-carved box, which sat lifelessly hour after hour on a window ledge. She visited it most days, generally in the evening. The peculiarity of how it got there was overlooked.


Dusty remnants of the past clung to the box and shone as beams of light shot through the window. The slightest touch could cause cascades of dust float up like swirling waves, soon after settling back where they came from. Her powdery fingers, streaked with mud, touched the box, stroking it as if it was a kitten. But when she lifted the lid, the residue was swept away; as indeed her mind did when she saw what was inside. A tear rolled down her flushed face, before dropping and blotching the lost photo of her dead grandfather.

hope you liked it!!!!. please comment for further editing.

18 comments:

  1. very good and i liked the description for example the way you described the box!

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  2. arrh - i posted this after the deadline!!!!!!!!!!:(

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  3. I don't know the meaning of most of those words!!
    In every piece of your writing there is great description.

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  4. good description and maybe a little more writing.

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    1. I doesn't need any more word

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  5. a bit more writing but other than that excellent :)

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  6. really good elephant

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  7. i dont thnk you need more writing because its amazing

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  8. I like the way you ended on a cliff hanger

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  9. Plz be reminded guys that this was supposed to be for the 100 word challenge so it was supposed to b short

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  10. Very very good

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  11. a really good piece of descriptive writing

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  12. a really smashing piece of descriptive writing

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  13. very nice like the descriptive writing

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  14. A really good piece of writing.

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