As I lay under the evening
sky I found myself falling asleep. BANG! I woke up “Hello” I called out into the beautiful
evening sky but no reply. Slowly the sky got darker, I decided I would go back
to my house. Slowly I got up I seamed to be in a mysteriously dark forest. I
didn’t know why or how I got here or where I was. I started running my heart
beating with terror. Thump! I hit the ground. I think my leg has broke. “Help” I
cried through puddles of tears. Suddenly there was a scream…
very good Lauren. i liked the end bit!
ReplyDeleteThat was coooooooool
ReplyDeleteOOH Lauren, you have created some great tension in this piece of writing. Well done. I think that your choice of descriptive words has helped you to do this. Remember to reread your writing before you edit to check it for spelling and grammar - you want it to be perfect! Keep writing and sharing!
ReplyDeleteMary (Team 100WC)
Australia
great 100wc Lauren pluss you used metiphores
ReplyDeletewell done Lauren. Mum and I liked it very much
ReplyDeleteThat was scary
ReplyDeletethat is really good, nice piece of writing!
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