One gorgeous day Lola and Ruby were excited about going to
the park. As their car stopped suddenly, Ant and Dec came out. They were
kidnapping them and then drove off.
The two terrified girls arrived at a haunted house and were
made to work as slaves. In the evening they had to sleep in the dark cold
dungeon.
Whilst exploring a ghost appeared and warned them not to
mess with the kidnappers.
Meanwhile the police were frantically searching for them and
luckily found the relieved girls. Ant and Dec were arrested and they all got on
with their life.
By Jennifer
What a scary story! I hope it wasn't the famous Ant and Dec who kidnapped them!
ReplyDeleteGood sentence length and punctuation and well arranged on the page, making it easy to read.
Keep up the good writing.
no its not and thank you very much
ReplyDeleteWell done sweetheat nanny is very very proud of you love you lots xxx
ReplyDeleteThat was brilliant Jennifer, Great work. I liked that you used Ant and Dec in your story very funny. Well set out and great punctuation.
ReplyDeleteWow,I love your story ,I wonder what happens next!!
ReplyDeletethanks and i love you too nanny!!!!!!!
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