I clutched her hand in agony. The doctors expression told it all. A noise I had dreaded all my life sounded.
It was unbearable. I fell on the floor outside in despair. I heard sirens. It's engine got louder. The ambulance dodged me. But then went into the hospital.
It went into a fire ball. The hospital started to burn. I had a choice. Babies were screaming or I could save the doctor that helped my mum but i wondered what i would do.
I chose to save the doctor. She was very grateful and was completely honored for it.
Hi Mal, what an interesting idea for your 100WC this week.
ReplyDeleteI like your use of short sentences, they create tension in your writing.
I also think that you have used some fabulous vocabulary; clutched, agony, expression, dreaded, unbearable, despair and dodged... What a list!
Maybe next time, you could include some higher level connectives in your writing to help the story move on. Some examples; however, meanwhile, although and eventually.
Well done and keep writing. :)