Thursday, 27 February 2014
Unloved House description by Amy
As
Luke trudged down the rickety staircase, he realised just how much of a mess
the house was. Newspapers were scattered all around in each and every room, dating
back to at least 1992. In the kitchen, plates from last night would have more
and more sticky sludge, as the nights carried on. If the winds were to get too reckless,
the house would creek struggling to keep standing. One night, there was a storm,
too strong for the unloved house to cope with. The building suddenly collapsed
into no more than little pieces of concrete, taking Luke with it.
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Very good.You described it very well.
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ReplyDeleteReally good i loved it i really want to know what happens next
ReplyDeleteit sounds like it had been written by a real author
ReplyDeleteIt makes you want to read on so can you make part two?!
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