The attic held memories. The memories were held
in a beautifully-carved box, which sat lifelessly hour after hour on a window
ledge. She visited it most days, generally in the evening. The peculiarity of
how it got there was overlooked.
Dusty remnants of the past clung to the box and shone
as beams of light shot through the window. The slightest touch could
cause cascades of dust float up like swirling waves, soon after settling back
where they came from. Her powdery fingers, streaked with mud, touched the box,
stroking it as if it was a kitten. But when she lifted the lid, the residue was
swept away; as indeed her mind did when she saw what was inside. A tear rolled
down her flushed face, before dropping and blotching the lost photo of her dead
grandfather.
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very good and i liked the description for example the way you described the box!
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