Slowly as the sky gets darker, a plate crashed to the floor as i was laying in my soft comfy bed,i lay there still and shocked blinking a couple of times to make sure this was real. Just as i was about to walk out my bedroom door i hear foot steps thundering up the stairs, as quick as a cheetah i retreated back to my bed. As my hands were shaking like someone who was in the middle of the north pole i yanked the covers over my head . My eyes bulging with fear as i hear my bedroom door creak open . I CANT BREATH !
by Ellie Andrews
exquisite writing Ellie. Keep up the fantastic work
ReplyDeleteGood work Ellie i like your simaly.
ReplyDeleteReally good, i like your use of similes
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