by Sophie
TROUBLE BREWS
Their day was only just beginning and already there was excitement all
around Harry and Louis’ dad’s extremely manic house.
Their dad warned them that there was a robber on the loose. Immediately they
both wanted to find the robber.
“I will never ever give up until I find him.” Shouted Harry. “Neither will I,”
agreed Louis the trouble maker.
“Let’s take our dad’s car, he won’t mind.” Murmured Harry. “Ok our big
mission begins in just a few minutes.
They set off. The car stopped suddenly… in front of them was the robber
about to attack with his ginormous axe.
A fantastic adventure, Sophie. I like the idea of the extremely manic house! You've really thought hard about descriptive alternatives to the word 'said'.
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