Short life
I new something was up the minute got in bed , I had that picture in my head of nauseating blood dripping I ran to the bathroom feeling vile. I wanted to scream , I just could not get that picture out of my head. The mirror cracked ,then I heard a scream.
I went out side and found someone drenched in blood, with scattered glass everywhere .I Felt a hand grab me and the next thing I was dead. Know one ever lived after that day the only thing that lived was what killed everyone and everythink. THE END by Alisha.
Oh my goodness me Alisha - what an ending! I had to go back to the picture so I could see what you meant by the dripping blood - I hadn't seen it as blood before, so you made me look at the picture in a different way. Thank you!
ReplyDeleteYou've used some cracking words - "nauseating", "vile" and "drenched". They are really in keeping with your theme. Well done.
Keep writing and I can't wait to read your next story!
omg that was the best i love it was cooooooooooooooooooooooooooooool!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeletewooooooow that was AWSOME !!!!
ReplyDeletethat blew my head of it is so Cooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooool
ReplyDeletewell done
ReplyDeletegood writing i liked it when it goes," the mirror cracked " it makes it more freaky and by the way say hi to Mr Dooley for me.
ReplyDeleteHow could you be writing it if you were dead?
ReplyDeletei agree with Cupkake heaven, but i love the story. really good.
ReplyDeleteI loved the story alisha
ReplyDeletegreat description
ReplyDeleteSCARY !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeletegood good
ReplyDeleteYou spelt everything wrong
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